Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT BUILDING MORE SPORTING FACILITIES IS THE MOST EFFECTIVE WAY TO IMPROVE PUBLIC
HEALTH
,
HOWEVER
OTHER SAID THAT PLAYING SPORT ALONE IS NOT SUFFICIENT. ACCORDING TO THEM, OTHER MEASURES ARE REQUIRED TO ENSURE PUBLIC
HEALTH
. IN MY VIEWPOINT, SPORT NOT MEAN THAT THE PEOPLE CONTINUOUS PLAYING AND THEY DO NOT KEEP FOLLOW TO THEIR DIET AND LIFESTYLE.
MOREOVER
, THERE ARE SEVERAL BENEFITS TO INDULGING IN SPORT ACTIVITIES. MOST OF THE INDOOR AND OUTDOOR SPORTS REQUIRED PHYSICAL EFFORTS AND
THIS
IN TURN MAKES A PEOPLE ACTIVE AND FLEXIBLE.
FURTHER
IT HELPS TO BETTER THE PHYSICAL BODY.
ADDITIONALLY
, A STUDENT PLAY SPORTS REGULARLY BASIS,
FURTHERMORE
THE CHILDREN IS FITTER THAN NORMAL PEOPLE.
THUS
, SPORTS HELP PEOPLE FEEL BROAD AND OPEN MINDED IN THINKING
SUCH
AS OLD AGE PEOPLE ARE NOT MUCH DEEP FEELING BUT THEY ARE NARROW MINDED IN NATURE,
THEREFORE
THEIR THINKING POWER IS NOT AS MUCH STRONG.
IN ADDITION
TO, SPORTS ARE BENEFICIAL FOR
HEALTH
BECAUSE THEY GET RID FROM HUMAN BODY
SUCH
AS HEART
,
Accept space
,
CONSTIPATION, SUGAR AND CHOLESTEROL ETC. DO SPORTS AS MUCH BUT PURSUE THEIR
HEALTH
SUCH
AS DIET AND LIFESTYLE.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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