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Band 1

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows the
number
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 of
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 graduates in Canada 1992 between 2007. And the
number
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 of
famales
an animal that produces gametes (ova) that can be fertilized by male gametes (spermatozoa)
females
families
 and males. It can clearly be seen between the
years both
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years, both
 genders had improved. The
strast
a narrow channel of the sea joining two larger bodies of water
strait
strata
strut
 of the year the
number
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 of graduates females were almost 110.000 and males were 70.000. From 1992 up to 2007
famales
an animal that produces gametes (ova) that can be fertilized by male gametes (spermatozoa)
female
females
 numbers of graduates
at
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of
 the university were more than males.Between 1994 to 1996 had increased.
On the other
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hand from
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hand, from
 1998 to 2000 both
gender
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genders
 had decreased.
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Furthermore after
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Furthermore, after
 2005 both
gender
Suggestion
genders
has not decreased
Suggestion
have not decreased
 again.
Besides
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 end of 2007
famales
an animal that produces gametes (ova) that can be fertilized by male gametes (spermatozoa)
female
 graduates were nearly 150.000.
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Also males
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Also, males
 were well-nigh 100.000. Above all of the information we can see the
number
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 of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Females are more educated.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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