Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development

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Today many

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Today, many

people rely on technologies for many aspects of their lives, mainly for working and communication.

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Doubtlessly

, technologies provide endless opportunities for people relating their jobs or education,

however

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however, this

this

is not valid for people's relationships with one another. Technologies have left a big impact on how people communicate with each other. Years

ago before

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ago, before

modern technologies came into people's

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

, to meet someone you will have to go out. Friends met

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pubs or restaurants to spend hours talking to each other, they preferred to spend every minute they were free outside socialising with others. Now, people do not feel the need to leave the comfort of their homes to talk to a loved one as they can use different social sites or apps,

such

as Facebook, Skype or Viber. Even they can use camera and video chats to see each other.

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Prediction or recommendation

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

144 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Interact
Social media platforms
Networking
Instant messaging
Face-to-face interaction
Misunderstandings
Emotional context
Superficial connections
Deceptive identities
Privacy concerns
Social skills
Video calls
Online presence
Digital communication
Cyber relationships

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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many young children are spending large amount of time in front of screens. What are the causes of this and what other problems does it lead to?

In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas. What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films?

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers must work in the country where they were trained. Others think that they should have the right to work in another country if they wanted to. Discuss both of these points of view and express your own opinion.

Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.