Line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by australian teenagers.

Line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by australian teenagers.
The line graph compares figures for
annual
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an annual
the annual
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number of eaten in three different junk food (
pizza
,
fish
and
chips
, and
hamburgers
) by teenagers over the period of 25 years in Australia.
It is clear that
eating
fish
and
chips
fell steadily,
while
number
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the number
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of people who consume
the
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apply
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pizza
and
hamburgers
increased gradually and overtook that
for
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of
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fish
and
chips
in 1985 and 1990. In 1975, around 100
fish
and
chips
consumed
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were consumed
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by Australian teenagers in a year. Over
following
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the following
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five years average yearly eating
this
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dropped by nearly 83 times, before rising to over 87.
However
, there was
considerable
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a considerable
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drop of approximately 40 times in the number of
fish
and
chips
consumers.
Fugures
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Figures
Futures
for
pizza
and
hamburgers
were the least common fast food during 1975 just 5 and 3
respevtively
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respectively
. By 1995 there was a significant growth in
hamburgers
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hamburger
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eating, it reached a peak at 100 and stood steady and were popular fast food.
Pizza
eating
also
rose gradually, reaching about 85 times yearly in 1995 and the figure remained stable over 5 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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