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Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are many ways to de-stress
such
 as sleep,
rest
, exercise and sport. Each
people
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person
have
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has
 own different way to relax. We do not know which is
better
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the best
method but
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method, but
 we should find suitable thing. In my opinion, I believe that we just follow their own way to relax whatever you want,
then
 that method is the best for us. There are two kinds of
person
 in personality like dynamic
person
 and static
person
. If they face a serious problem,
solution
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the solution
also
 different. Static
person
think
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thinks
 that
relax meaning
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relax, meaning
 is just calm down, not
activity
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actively
acted
.
Thus
, when they feel tired or get a stress, they never go out and stay at home and just take a
rest
 and sleep. Their body and mental
also think
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also thinks
 that they need a
rest
 themselves. According to research, some doctor mention about sleeping time because people only need to sleep 6 hours for
have
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having
 time to recharge
themselves but
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themselves, but
 result of research, sleeping hours is different, depending on people. Some people need 10 hours of sleep to recover; while other people do not need to lots of time to sleep. Like
this
, relaxing
also
 different. People who think they should only
rest
 or sleep for relaxing think that moving like exercise or sport
is
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has been
 just energy consumption.
On the other hand
, dynamic
person
 is very active. They think that
rest
 or sleep
also
 way to
relax but
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relax, but
 work out or sports activity
also
 part of relax. Through the discharge of sweat, they feel
relax
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relaxed
 and calm down their body and metal
also
. Active
person
think
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thinks
 that just sleep or
rest
 is that make them bored and depressed. In young
children
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child's
children's
 situation, they never stop their movement, activity. They keep
work
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working
 out with their friends before going to sleep. Parents concerned about their children without
resting but
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resting, but
 children do not think that because, when they are working out in the outside,
then
 they feel
refresh
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refreshed
 and gain energy. In conclusion, some people believe that through sleep or
rest
, they feel
relax
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relaxed
 while others believe that it does not matter whatever we do for relax because, even though they really work out hard, they feel calm
dawn
soft fine feathers
down
 and recharge their
life
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lives
. As the result, I believe that it is just up to us because we should respect them respectively.
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