University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies.

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Introduction

Many University students routinely study in other institutes around the world as part of their degree.

Although

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studying

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foreign countries enables the student to experience different work environment, they are substantially expensive. In my opinion, students

benefits

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benefit

more by studying abroad even though they have to pay

significant amount

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a significant amount

significant amounts

of money.

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One of the main

advantage

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advantages

of studying abroad is that student will have the opportunity to experience

beautiful distinct work culture

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beautiful, distinct work culture

a beautiful distinct work culture

a beautiful distinct work culture a beautiful distinct work culture

of that region which would have been impossible if they had

have

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had

only studied in their own place. The knowledge students gain from these set-up will make them to excel in their career when compared to other students.

For example

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, the recruitment record of Tesla incorporation shows that more than 50 percent of their employees are graduates with international internship experience.

Therefore

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, these working conditions

makes

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make

a profound impact on the future of the students.

Body paragraph 2

On the other hand

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, studying overseas require money not only for paying the University but

also

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for the living.

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students can support themselves by part time jobs, not all nations

provides

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provide

this

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chance to foreigners. Some students realize that they are unable to afford to live in other countries in

later half

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the later half

of the

college

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and eventually quit and return home.

This

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serious issue as they may not receive

college

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certificate.

For instance

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, when I studied in

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the UK

, four of my Indian friends had to quit the

college

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as they could not pay

fee

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fees

for final year and the

college

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could not issue them with certificates.

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Thus studying

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Thus, studying

abroad requires paramount fund as it is expensive.

Conclusion

To conclude, there is a significant increase in

number

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the number

of pupils who prefer to study in foreign countries as part of their program. While

this

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is costly it will ultimately lead the student to train in

different workplace

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different workplaces

a different workplace

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Thus I

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Thus, I

believe

abroad

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a broad

education is more advantageous than disadvantageous.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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