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Band 7

1.In recent years, more and more people choose to live by themselves. Is it positive or negative for the development of the society?

It has become far normal for people to live alone, particularly in metropolitan areas in the developed world. From my perspective, I firmly agree that the demerits of solitary lifestyle prevail over its possible merits.
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 of all, property prices and rents will inevitably arise if more and more people choose to live on their own. To be specific, living a solitary lifestyle can increase pressure on housing shortages, while there is not enough space to build more houses in a limited urban area.
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, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents. A survey conducted by 'TIMES NOW' reported that Shenzhen property rates have been increased by 35% in the
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 5 years due to the increase in the number of people living alone.
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, the increasing trend of living alone has a direct relationship with the percentage of people suffer from psychological problems these days.
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, living alone creates loneliness and depression, unlike the traditional family where there are always others to share someone’s distress and sadness. Tolerating negative emotions alone often leads people to become introverted, egoistic and eccentric. A recent Shenzhen University study reveals that single-person family members who saw a psychiatrist increased by 20% over
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 year. In conclusion, the increase in one-person households has more detrimental effects on the development of the society because that it may not only cause house prices to rise but
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 it is negative
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 people's mental health.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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