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Describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having too much leisure time

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Today, I would like to tell you about my
leisure
time
.
Leisure
time
 is very necessary for many people in the world after stressful work and study. There are many ways to entertain
such
 as: listening to musics, reading books, cooking some dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, going out with friends… In my spare
day
, I usually listen to
music
 and I can say it is my favourite relaxation activities. I began listening to soul when I was 12 years old. I like listening to English
music
 because there are many benefits. Every
day
, I spend four to five minutes listening to English
music
 and it helps me to learn a lot of vocabulary. I often listen some songs
such
 as: on my ways, all falls down… The other reason that I love listening to
music
 is that it makes me feel relax and happy after studying hard. I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening because I can do a lot of things when I stay at home
such
 as: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing
day
 by
day
 so many young people usually stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends on Facebook. Lifestyle now a
day
 is more modern than in the past so many people always spend
time
 enjoying new technology, but I still enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel very happy and peaceful. In my viewpoint, there are positive side and negative side about having
leisure
time
. Let’s begin by looking at the positive side.
Firstly
, having
leisure
time
 helps people relax and feel happy in their world.
Secondly
, when they play games online in computer – it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world.
On the other hand
, having much
leisure
time
 come with the string of bad points
such
 as: bore dome, anxiety even depressive. It can lead to bad habit making, lack of focus as well as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids now.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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