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children nowadays watch significantly more television than those in the past which reduces the activity level accordingly why is this the case what measures can you suggest to encourage higher level of activity among children give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

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In
this
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 modern epoch, it is an undeniable fact that juveniles are more indulged in indoor games and
electronics
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electronic
 gadgets to spend their leisure
time
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.
Furthermore
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, it is observed that, recently, children utilize more
time
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 to watch
television
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, than compared to
past
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the past
 and it reduces their daily physical activities.
Although
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, there are various reasons
to
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for
this
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, it can be reduced and physical activities of youngsters can be boosted with appropriate measures, and
this
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 essay intends to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 these causes as well as solutions with suitable illustrations.
To begin
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 with, it is largely noted that, at present there are numerous
television
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 channels with
variety
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a variety
 of children oriented programs. To expatiate
this
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, unlike the
past there
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past, there
 are comparatively more
television
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 channels for juveniles with a range of programs and most of them are broadcasted as
series
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a series
.
For example
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, some cartoon programs
such
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 as, 'Vir The Robot', influences the youngsters and they are forced to watch each and every episode.
Similarly
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, there are several programs from channel to channel, that the young ones cannot move away from the
television
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.
Hence
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, these programs
causes
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cause
 addiction to children and they spend more
time
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to watch
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watching
television
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. Admittedly, it is usually visible that, the increased number of nuclear families and hectic schedule of parents, forces infants to watch
television
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 more and do more indoor games which include electronic games. To reiterate
this
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, most of the parents are busy during these days with their work and children are left at home with
television
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 and other electronic gadgets without any control of grandparents or other elders. Due to
this
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 offsprings are completely free to spend their leisure
time
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 on video games
such
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 as Minecraft and PUBG as well as cartoons, and
therefore
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 parents are a major factor for children to become less active and to watch more
television
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 today.
Eventhough
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, there are numerous factors as mentioned in the above paragraphs, the children can be controlled from watching excess of
television
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 programs and they can be encouraged to do more sports activities through the effort of parents and the governments. To elucidate, parents can admit juveniles to certain extracurricular programs, particularly, vacation classes for swimming and karate, which can help to keep children away from
television
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 and give them proper exercises.
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 to
this
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,
government
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the government
 can encourage children through providing enough public facilities for entertainment
such
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 as parks and sports stadiums. So with the combined action of parents and the governments, we can encourage sports activities in children.  To recapitulate, having discussed the reasons for the addiction of juveniles to
television
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, and the solution to prevent
this
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, as well as, to promote them to do more activities, it is clear that, it can be solved through proper attention.
However
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, the role of parents and authorities to solve
this
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 issue is imperative.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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