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It is often argued that it is difficult to get children to read. Why do you think this is? What measures could be taken to encourage children to read more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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All the
time
, parents debate about children unwillingly reading.
Therefore
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Therefore, this
this
 essay considers some reasons for resistance
such
activity
such
 as preference play, more active life; meanwhile, try to offer some solution for stimulation more reading including the
audiobooks
Suggestion
Audiobooks
 and game.
Firstly
, few parents can deny that majority children are
enrgetic
possessing or exerting or displaying energy
energetic
 that lead to tend always move, thereby prefer outdoor games;
however
, reading suppose the sedentary style of life that completely opposite to their preference.
Moreover
, reading means a lot of concentrate with the hard work of
brain
Suggestion
the brain
 that exhausted.
For example
, in my childhood we had homework, read
book
 consist of six hundred pages it was really annoying and hard, and I always tried to evade
such
activity
prefering
like better; value more highly
preferring
 walk or play on
street
Suggestion
the street
.
Additionally
, all children as adults are different so they have various preferences in
activity
 and type of a
book
, thereby sometimes they do not want
read
Suggestion
to read
 that parents offer them, because of it do not lay in their area of interest.
Although
, if pay attention to children's interests, parents can find out way encourage to read more, it means probably need give children freedom to choose types of
book
 whatever they want
instead
 of impose own
wiev
a married woman; a man's partner in marriage
wife
web
wave
.
For instance
, I always love
particular type
Suggestion
a particular type
 of
book
such
 as
fantastic genre
Suggestion
the fantasy genre
fantasy genre
 at the same
time
 cannot understand detective or romantic stories that frequently offer.
Likewise
, parents can create something like a game there they can ask children read them a
book
 because
mother
Suggestion
the mother
 or father interesting it
,
Accept space
,
 but not enough
time
 for reading; meanwhile, parents can alternate reading aloud with children seem to share family
activity
.
Furthermore
, presently new technology
stimulation reading
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stimulation, reading
 by
implement
Suggestion
implementing
audiobooks
Suggestion
Audiobooks
 that have been increasing popularity with
te
definite article
the
 years. To conclude, children have various
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 do not to read and role at the same
time
 burden parents find out key to encourage
do
Suggestion
doing
 it because of one the best way, in reason
defference
the quality of being unlike or dissimilar
difference
differences
 all people, has never been
finding
Suggestion
found
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • overwhelming presence
  • auditory stimulation
  • imagination
  • concentration
  • digital content
  • role models
  • captivate
  • e-books
  • interactive reading apps
  • positive reinforcement
  • gamify
  • communal engagement
  • personalized reading recommendations
  • foster
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