Children nowadays spent a great deal of time watching television however television can not replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less educated today .To what extend do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays the children devote the majority of time watching their favourite TV shows than reading books.
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is owing to which the illiteracy of the students.
Television
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can not
can not
cannot
supercede
take the place or move into the position of
supersede
the books.
This
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essay elucidate and my opinion towards the topic
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Firstly books
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Firstly, books
are bombarded with
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
of information so the children can easily understand and analyse the topics with relevant examples.But
television
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can not be showing the information or study topics as books.
For instance
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a student
devote
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devotes
his her time to watch TV programs than studying books so the can not get target score
Moreover
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the
television
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shows can devote the time of each
children
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child
with comedy programs
,
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,
seialsor
Suggestion
other
entrainment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
programs.But the book can enhance the knowledge
also
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
the book is
indispensable vfactor
Suggestion
an indispensable factor
indispensable factor
indispensable v factor
of every individual
.
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.
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for
Suggestion
For
example
,
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,
continues watching of
television
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shows with entertainment programs
bcan
able to
can
not improve the knowledge
.
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.
Overall
,
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,
the books are the massive source of information band knowledge.
enhance
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Enhance
the use of books than
television
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.

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