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Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women?

#government #percentage #jobs #women
I would like
to begin
this
 essay with a quote that draws my attention to Carlota
de
 Barcino, and says: "The world of the company is a
sove
free from danger or the risk of harm
safe
 world, and neither the male nor female work model can provide a balanced organization without complementing the other. But not only is it necessary to achieve a balance between male and female skills within the organization; its precise that
this
 balance is true in every man" Traditionally in companies and in most jobs or businesses, male presence predominated, which tended to create environments with a lack of communication, individualistic attitudes and a
ome
 male supremacy that despised women.
However
, we can now begin to imagine an environment of so different work.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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