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Describe your leisure time and give opinion about advantages and disadvantages of having too much free time

Hello everyone! I’m a beginner in IELTS and I hope all members in the Speaking IELTS group help me to improve four skills in English. Today, I would like to tell you about my break
time
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. Leisure
time
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 is very necessary for many people in the world after stressful work and study. There are many ways to entertain like that: listening to
music
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, reading books, cook some dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, hanging out with friends… In my spare
time
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, I usually listen to
music
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 and I can say it is my favourite leisure activity. I began listening to
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 when I was 12 years old. I like listening to
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 because there are many benefits. Every
day
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, I spend 4-5 minutes listening to English
music
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 and it helps me to learn a lot of vocabulary. I often listen some songs
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 as: on my ways, all falls down… The other reason that I love listening to
music
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 is that it makes me feel relax and happy after studying hard. I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening because I can do a lot of things when I stay at home like that: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing
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 by
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 so many young people usually stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends on Facebook. Lifestyle now a
day
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 is more modern than in the past so many people always spend
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 enjoying new technology, but I still enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel very happy and peaceful. In my viewpoint, there are positive sides and negative sides, about having leisure
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. Let’s begin by looking at the positive side.
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, having free
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 helps people relax and feel happy in their world.
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, when they play games online in computer – it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world.
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, having much free
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time comes
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time, comes
 with the string of bad point e.G: bore dome, anxiety and even depression. It can lead to bad habit making, lack of focus as well as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids now.

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