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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT TO SOLVE THE TRAFFIC CONGESTION IS TO INCREASE TAX BUT OTHER DISAGREE. DISCUSS BOTH AND GIVE OPINION

#people #traffic #congestion #tax
It is true that to impose additional tax on private vehicles is one of the way
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
demotivated
 to purchase private
car
 that has significant impact on traffic jam.There are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 two vital reasons are increasing living standard and relocation of population.
In
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On
 the one hand, people who are staying in developing countries like
Bangladesh where
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Bangladesh, where
 Dhaka is the main hub of the country. Here living standard of the people is becoming upgraded and they prefer to own their cars. Sometimes, we noticed more than one
car
 is being used for a single family. Presently,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
 imposed two hundred percent tax in case of purchase a new
car but
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car, but
 it cannot stop the buying tendency because of the buying capacity
that is
 skyscrapers. So,
high income level
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high income levels
may plays
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may play
 a crucial role in
this
 case.
On the other hand
, due to urbanization, more people are
intended
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intending
 to
come the capital city
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come to the capital city
. The reason behind
this
 situation, lots of industries and business hub is being situated over there. So, to find the employment opportunity, rural people are migrating
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the urban areas where more transportation is required to facilitate themselves. Though
public transportation system
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the public transportation system
 is not up to the mark, so people's are willing to buy a
car
 for themselves, and
this
 is caused for traffic jam which is on
of
Suggestion
about
 the burning issue. To sum up,
government
Suggestion
the government
 may get benefited by imposing
tax but
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tax, but
 it cannot help to reduce traffic jam due to many adjacent factors.

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