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School going children should not be allowed to use internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #children #internet
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Internet
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The internet
 is
big knowledge repository
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a big knowledge repository
the big knowledge repository
. It is now easier than ever to access the
internet
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 whether you are using a computer, phone or tablet. Whether the school children should allow to use
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internet
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the internet
 or not has always remained debatable. The essay supports the former notion. The critics believe that, if children should use more
internet
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, they become addicted to online gaming, social sites and other sites. They may fall into bad company.
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, there is a chance of misguidance, as number of fake sites on the
internet
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 provide the incorrect and inappropriate information.
Thus
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, School children should be restricted to use
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internet
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the internet
. The
internet
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 is
also
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 advantageous for the kids. It helps to widen their knowledge and improve their grades.
For instance
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, from the various discovery websites, students gather the information about the
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
 and endangered species.
As a result
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, they work to save the environment and learn the importance of the other species in the natural food cycle.
Therefore
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, they are
able do their
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able to do their
 homework and projects with additional information available on the
internet
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.
Additionally
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,
internet
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 helps to make the global connection. They practice foreign languages and able to connect with other students with similar interests across the world.
Besides
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this
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, using
internet
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 education can be taught
at
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in
 rural
areas where
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areas, where
 no teachers are available. Students in
village
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the village
a village
 can learn through video conferencing and give the online exams.
Hence
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 they are able to get jobs and shine their future. Eventually,
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internet
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the internet
 can be beneficial for
them but
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them, but
 at the same time could
also
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 spoil them.
Therefore
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, the students should be given access in a controlled environment so that they browse the authentic and reliable contents only.

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