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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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The two charts show data about
computer
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 ownership between 2002 and 2010. The percentage of the population owning computers experienced a gradual increase during that period going from
a
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50% to nearly
three quarters
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 of the population.  The analysis of
computer
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 ownership by educational level shows that the higher the level of education, the higher the percentage of
computer
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 owners.
Non high
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 school diplomas have always had the lowest rates, never reaching half of the population.
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 all levels of education show a progressive increase,
postgraduate
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 qualification is the most remarkable having nearly 100% of
computer
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 owners by 2010. In all, the
last
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 decade has seen a growth in ownership in general and at all levels of education.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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