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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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There are only few countries who have the nuclear arms and nowadays they are called superpower. They play
pivotal role
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a pivotal role
 to keep the
world
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 balanced and hold back from doing suppression to any region of the
world
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. Nuclear
energy
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also
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 uses in producing power which is in very low cost and effective.
Although
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 it has benefits, some people say that nuclear power plant should be banned.Before giving the opinion lets see the argument of both groups.
Firstly
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,
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,
after the cold war some countries like
china
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
,
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,
France
,
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Germany counties produce
nuclear
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a nuclear bomb
nuclear bombs
bomb
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. North Korea and Iran try to produce
nuclear
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a nuclear bomb
bomb
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as a
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result they
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result, they
 are facing financial and other
imposement
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 from USA and EU. Pakistan and India both have the nuclear
bomb
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 for
this
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 reason
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this
plural of "this"
these
 two
countries despite
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countries, despite
 of some conflict never join in
war
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the war
 because they know the devastating effect of Nuclear
bomb
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.Russian and America both have nuclear arms
as a
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result they
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result, they
 always
critic
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criticizing
criticize
criticise
criticising
 each
other but
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other, but
 dare to fight each other which is essential
for
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to
 keep the harmony in the
world
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.
In addition
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 to
that about
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that, about
 20% of electricity derive from nuclear
energy
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 which is very
cheap
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cheaper
 than
anyother
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any other
 form of
energy
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.
Moreover
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 Nuclear
energy
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 is a good source of
chemo therapy which
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chemotherapy, which
chemotherapy which
 is used in cancer treatment.
On the other hand
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,
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,
Critics
says
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say
 that nuclear
energy
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 is unsafe and it became life threatening for mankind.They have shown the example of Fukoshima and
cheronobil
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 tragedy where thousands of people die.They
also
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 say that the competition of producing nuclear weapon once
lead
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leads
 to
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third
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a third world war
world
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 war which may destroy the
world
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. In my
opinion despite
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opinion, despite
 of devastating uses of nuclear
energy
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 every country should produce nuclear
energy
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 but nuclear weapon should banned.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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