The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
The pie charts compare information about the main factors to make happy
according to
two age group
( under 30 and over 30 )
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groups
Overall
, It is clear that
both age group
present similarities and differences. Both age Fix the agreement mistake
groups
grouos
consider that achievement at work Correct your spelling
groups
bring
them the highest percentage of happiness. Doing hobbies represent the Change the verb form
brings
second
largest percentage.
Firstly
, it can be observed that achievement at work account
for 63 % of Correct subject-verb agreement
accounts
happiness
factor Correct article usage
the happiness
collectevitly
. Correct your spelling
collectively
Moreover
, 22% of people
who are under 30 said that hobbies make then
happy. It can be seen Correct your spelling
them
almonst
the same amount of Correct your spelling
almost
amongst
people
( 22%) over 30 that consider a leisure time an importan
reason to be happy.
Turning to the differences, Correct your spelling
important
it is clear that
having a good apparence
and travelling Correct your spelling
appearance
represent
an essential factor for young Change the verb form
represents
people
, comprised
18 % and 15 % respectively. Wrong verb form
comprising
In contrast
, people
who are over 30 gives
more priority to Correct subject-verb agreement
give
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financial
finantial
security ( 20 %) and being with family ( 14 %)Correct your spelling
financial
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