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is internet beneficial ? do what extent you agree

#internet
Technology has changed our lifestyle, significantly
internet
 has made everything more accessible
then
 it uses to be in the past. To my mind, it is debatable that
internet
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the internet
 can be regarded as a positive development.
First
 of all, for earlier generation students it was complicated and time consuming to look for certain data, which is easily accessible nowadays with one search on the
web
. It is understandable that students had books and teachers as their source for various questions and queries.
For instance
, to find
meaning
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the meaning
 of a word they had to review dictionaries.
Thus
,
internet
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the internet
 has certainly made
study
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the study
 more advantageous. Another positive result of the evolution of
internet
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the internet
 is the availability of working from home for certain sectors. Undoubtedly, not every person has been benefited
by
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from
work
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the work
 from home strategy, but it has given
oppurnity
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the opportunity
opportunity
an opportunity
 to many.
Therefore
, providing more family and personal time to individuals,
nevertheless
, lowering their expenses of travel as well. In my experience, my cousin who works for a bank, works from home and she has a great privilege to take care of her 2-year-old son, helping her in many ways, greatly saving money from daycares.
By contrast
,
web
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the web
 has
also
 some negative effects like false advertisements that attracts young people to spend money. Meanwhile, surfing
web
 people are shown numerous advertisements that influences people to buy.
For example
, some websites are paid to show ads of clothing website that usually asks them to visit for some discount coupons.
Therefore
, it is
undeniable
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undeniably
 true that
web
 surfing is
alluring place
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an alluring place
 for businesses to trap individual’s attention. To conclude, I would like to suggest that
although
internet
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the internet
 has provided options to spend money easily,
this
 is not necessarily a negative effect as compared to the useful resources it has provided.
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