The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
the pie charts indicate the results of the survey about what makes
people
happy by dividing people
`s age. In general, it seems both pie charts have some similarities and differences.
For both charts, the highest percentage of the factor that makes them happy was work achievements for under
30 and over 30 Correct pronoun usage
those under
people
, 31% and 32% respectively. Moreover
, 22% of people
who are under 30 said that when they`re doing their hobbies they feel most happy. It is clear to notice that almost same
amount of Correct article usage
the same
people
(22%) who is over 30 say that they feel happiness
from their leisure time activities.
On the other hand
, having a good appearance 18%, travelling (15%) and other factors (14%) are most important for people
under thirty`s happiness
. In contrast
, for people
over 30, financial stability 20
%, and being with family (14%) become the reasons Add a missing verb
is 20
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for
happiness
.
Overall
, it is important to note that work and hobby
are Fix the agreement mistake
hobbies
most
essential Correct article usage
the most
happiness
source
for any age Fix the agreement mistake
sources
people
. However
, good looking and travelling are the second
crucial reason for young people
. By comparison
, for people
who are over 30, financial security and family are significantly important factor
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factors
their
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in their
happiness
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