Learning English at schools is often seen as more important than local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it more important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure survival of local languages and if so, how?

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It is widely believed that prioritizing teaching
English
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at schools, will be more beneficial for the future compared to focusing on local
languages
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. Personally, I strongly disagree with
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view for a few reasons.
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with, I believe that by only focusing on
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, kids are not being taught about their origin and native culture, which is expressed through their mother
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.
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can cause a significant impact as the history and
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of entire civilizations are at risk of dying out, reducing the diversity of mankind. In fact, it has been shown by Oxford University that over the
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century, we have lost over 100
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and their associated cultures, as globalization accelerates in the 20th century. Even though we can't deny the importance of
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in the modern world, ensuring the survival of local
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is
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important to me, as it's preserving what makes humanity so special, the diverse stories told from different corners of the world. To accomplish
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objective, one of the proposed solutions I have is to make these
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classes accessible and appealing to everyone.
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can be done by promoting traditional customs by focusing on the cultural products of a
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, ensuring that it will appeal to a younger generation which
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inspires them to discover the
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's culture as a whole. As an example, the Korean Wave of cultural products have moved beyond the boundaries of its home
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, appealing to people all around the world which resulted in an 80% rise in the demand to learn Korean. In conclusion,
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the rise of
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, local
languages
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have been deemed less important and are at risk of going extinct.
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, I believe that through the effective promotion of a
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/culture's beauty, we can rekindle the demand for the respective
language
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, sustaining the diversity of human society.
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