The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
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The given pie charts compare the percentage of
water
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consumed for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in
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Diego
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,
California
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and the
world
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as a whole. It is noticeable that residential usage accounts for the vast majority of
water
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consumption
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in the two American regions.
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, the rest of the
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consumes more
water
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in agriculture than in industry or domestic. In
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Diego
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County and
California
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state, 60% and 39% of total
water
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consumption
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is
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are
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utilized in domestic,
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only a mere
of
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8% of
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water
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the water
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used globally goes to homes. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at agricultural usage.
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accounts for a massive 69% of
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use in the rest of the
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, but only 17% and 28% of the total
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consumption
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in
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Diego
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and
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respectively.
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dramatic differences are not seen when we compare the figures for industrial
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consumption
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. The same proportion of
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(23%) is used by
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Diego
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and the
world
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as a whole,
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the figure for
California
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is slightly higher, at 33%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california, world, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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