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GRAPH DISPLAYING INFORMATION ABOUT LONDON UNDERGROUND STATION

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The graph illustrates the number of passengers at a given period of time throughout the day
in
Suggestion
at
on
 the London Underground station. From the fluctuating graph, it is clear that the digit of passengers increases during the mornings. It
then
 remains somewhat steady during noon and afternoon,
however increasing
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however, increasing
 significantly during the evenings. Starting at 6am, the total of passengers is 100 and
then
 begins increasing every hour. At 8am it reaches a peak of 400 passengers. The figure of passengers starts to fall gradually from 8am-10am to reach about 180. At 11am the total of passengers escalate to reach about 280 passengers by 12pm, where it rises slightly to reach 300 passengers at 2pm. The number drops at 3pm to reach 230. At 4pm the digit of passengers rises sharply from 100 to about 480 passengers at 6pm. It later drops from 300 at 7pm to reach about 130 at 8pm,
then
 increase slightly to 170 at 9pm where it
finally
 decreases to reach 140.
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