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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

#people #centres #weekend #markets
It is often said that Nakhon Pathom Walking Street Weekend Market has a
lot
 of things to shop/buy.on
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One
a
eh e
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sees
see
set
sole
xample is that we can buy clothes
such
 Dessert,E
a
Accept space
,
rrings,a
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,
shirt,s
o
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,
cks,s
h
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,
ort jeans and fashion bag.
Also
, we can buy accessories
such
 as small cap, Heart rate monitor watch,H
e
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,
adphone/Phone case and Power Bang.
Besides
,w
e
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,
can buy animals
such
 as sq
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squirrel
squirrels
ugar, cat,H
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mster,R
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,
ttweiler,P
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,
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st striking features i
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the most striking features
s that we can do
lo
t o
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lots
f Chiang Mai Walking Street Ma
rkat.
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Market
Markets
That is
 to say,W
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,
can take photos of Beautiful woman, Handsome man, Coffee shop, Surfer,f
o
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,
od, Cute person and clothing Later, We can eat a
lot
 of foods su
chas F
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such as
rench fries, Pork steak, Hamburger and coke.
Additionally
, We can do exercises
such
 as wa
lk t
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walking
o buy food. It is a well-know fact that there are a
lot
 of reasons We like Chiang Mai Walking Street Market. One in
stace could b
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instance, could
instance could
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lot
 of food. A
part f
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Apart
rom
this
, it is be
auteous a
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beautiful
nd cost, cheap.
Finally
, I love Chiang Mai Walking Street Market a
lot
.
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