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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

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It is often said that walking street Davaravati Sri Nakhon Pathom has a lot of things to buy. One
such
 Example is that we can buy food
such
 as special fish cake, spicy chicken curry, American fried rice, Chinese noodles, Grilled Pork, and healthy barbecue.
Also
, we can buy
secondhand
Suggestion
second hand
 things
such
 as cheap telephone, Nike shoes,
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 bags, Beautiful jeans, old lamps, and
winter coat
Suggestion
a winter coat
winter coats
.
Besides
, we can buy fruits
such
 as Sweet watermelon, sour mango, orange, durian, coconut, and pomelo. One of the most striking features is that we can sell things at walking street Davaravati Sri Nakhon Pathom.
That is
 to say, we can sell accessories
such
 as sparking watch, Gold ring, Bright earrings, cute
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
, apple watch, and cool necklaces. Later, we can sell clothes
such
 as Long skirt, short dress, small jacket, blue jeans, smart suit, and screen shirt.
Additionally
, we can sell stationary
Such
 as white paper, Black pen, paint blush, 2B pencils, and comic book. It is a well-known fact that We have a lot of reasons why we like to go walking street Davaravati Sri Nakhon Pathom. One
instance could
Accept comma addition
instance, could
 be there are many shops and good memories in shopping. Apart from
this
, we can take a picture and happy to walk with
family
Suggestion
the family
.
Finally
, we can make a new friend and negotiate the price of the products.
Kanyaphak
 Phumkirana No.614479003 Sec. 61/90
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