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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

#people #centres #weekend #markets
It is often said that BIG
C
market
 weekend
market
 has a
lot
 of
thing
Suggestion
things
 to shop/buy. One
such
 example is that we can buy clothes
such
 as
sweatshirt
Suggestion
a sweatshirt
sweatshirts
, cargo pants, diamond ring, ruby earring, Gold glasses, stainless bracelet, Apple watch etc. One of the most striking feature is that we can do
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of activities at BIG
C
market
that is
 to say, we can take photos of cute girl, old temple, street foods, light background and
beautiful shop
Suggestion
beautiful shops
. Later, we can eat a
lot
 of foods
such
 as seafood Shabu, grill meat, milk ice-cream, fish burger and chocolate
bingsu
the state or fact of existing
beings
. It is a well-known fact that there can a
lot
 of reasons why like BIG
C
market
 weekend
market
.
Instance
Suggestion
The instance
 could be, convenient transportation because no traffic jam, bus stop and taxi. Apart from
this
,
BIG
Suggestion
the BIG C market
C
market
 is beautiful
such
 as light, shop, vender, background and not crowded.
Finally
, we can buy a
lot
 of many
thing
Suggestion
things
such
 as clothes, shoes, foods, furniture etc.
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