Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others?

It is commonly considered by many that the most effective method to
measure country’s
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measure a country’s
growth
is evaluating its economic progress, whereas others tend to oppose
this
idea and believe that there are other factors which represent the actual success.
This
essay shall delve into all
such
factors and
pickup
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pick up
the best one.
Education
facilities, health care provision and the equality of human rights should be considered while tracking country’s development.
Firstly
, a good
education
system is vital for the
growth
of any nation, where colleges and universities are taking responsibility to provide good quality of life for the future workers.
Secondly
, Health care facilities represent the wellness of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
.
That is
to say, it is very
high
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highly
likely for people to perform well and contributes towards the economic
growth
of the country, if its residents are fit and healthy, with no diseases.
Lastly
, gender equality and human rights could be taken into account.
For instance
, a country in which women
has
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have
less employment
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fewer employment
opportunities than men might be considered as less successful. In my opinion, a country’s
education
system is the best indicator to determine the development and
growth
of the country.
This
is because it has a considerable effect on
other two factors
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the other two factors
mentioned above. It affects the medical field in a sense that doctors and nurses can only treat patients if they have achieved the highest level of
education
and training.
Likewise
,
education
affects the rights of
human
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a human
humans
in a way that educated people will respect the rights and make the best use of it.
Additionally
, it
also
affects the economy
because well
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because, well
educated workforce will flourish the industries, leading to trade with other countries. To conclude, nation can be compared in
variety
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a variety
of ways, but I believe
education
standards
is
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are
the best approach to
measure
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measuring
country’s success.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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