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Every country should have a free health service even if this means that the latest treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#country #health #service #treatments
Nowadays, it is argued that each nation should provide free
health
service
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service, although
although
 it cannot have advanced treatments because of expensive cost. From my perspective, I completely agree with the statement due to its huge benefits.
However it
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However, it
also
 has two sides. Talking about the disadvantage of
this
 community
service
, the country will be reduced in revenue for treating patients so the cost to buy and produce modern equipment is
also
 reduced.
This
also
 has a significant impact on the economy for both underdeveloped and developing countries. About advantages.
Firstly
 free
health
 duty is very necessary for citizens, especially the poor. As you know, each year, a lot of poor people, who have a dangerous disease, are not able to access the medical use and have a suitable treatment. It leads to the result that a variety of poor people died because of serious disease.
Moreover
,
health
 problem can cause some related issues
such
 as rub, theft.
For instance
, some young people tend to become a criminal to have money to save their parents.
Secondly
, it is not very important to have the latest treatments in free
service
. The latest treatments appear mean that we must spend a lot of money to pay and it will put a strong burden on the government’s and residents’ shoulders. In conclusion, I believe that
health
Suggestion
health services
the health service
service
 should be made free for all areas in the world because of many advantages more disadvantages.

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