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Every country should have a free health service even if this means that the latest treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, it is argued that each nation should provide free
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 it cannot have advanced treatments because of expensive cost. From my perspective, I completely agree with the statement due to its huge benefits.
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 has two sides. Talking about the disadvantage of
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 community
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, the country will be reduced in revenue for treating patients so the cost to buy and produce modern equipment is
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 reduced.
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 has a significant impact on the economy for both underdeveloped and developing countries. About advantages.
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 free
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 duty is very necessary for citizens, especially the poor. As you know, each year, a lot of poor people, who have a dangerous disease, are not able to access the medical use and have a suitable treatment. It leads to the result that a variety of poor people died because of serious disease.
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 problem can cause some related issues
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, some young people tend to become a criminal to have money to save their parents.
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, it is not very important to have the latest treatments in free
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. The latest treatments appear mean that we must spend a lot of money to pay and it will put a strong burden on the government’s and residents’ shoulders. In conclusion, I believe that
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health services
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 should be made free for all areas in the world because of many advantages more disadvantages.

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