The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011

The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011
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The table gives a comparison of population proportion in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 between 5
age
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groups
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. Its clearly seen that the most cycling group of both genders are kids between
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0-9. Genders have small difference:
females
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are 51.3% and
males
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are 50.3%.
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group between 10-17 olds shows the significant change in proportion: 42.2% and 26.6% respectively.
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shows that less than half of adults are cycling in the town. Observing
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,
females
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are still have higher proportion of cycling than
males
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. But there is a percentage rise in elder people group, comparing to 18-39 and 40-59 year old people: 18.5% for
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and 13.2% for
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. The figures for the 18-39 and 40-59 year olds are much lower for both genders relatively to other
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groups
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. But its
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can be seen that women are cycling almost like one and a half times rather than man.
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,
females
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of all 5
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have higher percentage of cycling rather than
males
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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