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Some people believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high Level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is a commonly held belief that people whose jobs are physically demanding ought to be paid equally with other people with a higher level of qualification.
However
, some opine that
this
 should not be so because they are not in support.In my opinion, I disagree that people involved in physically demanding jobs should be paid the same amount to people with a higher level of degree.
This
 essay would expatiate the reasons for my view. One obvious reason why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am opinion that people with a higher level of degree should be paid more than people with jobs that are physically degree is simply because of the refined and intellectual skills.
In other words
, people with higher certification have the technical know-how and the idea behind the physically demanding jobs.
This
 is because they are the brain- box behind
this
 physically demanding
jobs
Suggestion
job
.
For example
, I worked as a manager of a food producing factory and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 was the brain -box behind the work be done by the factory workers because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 was able to bring out the necessary ideas and plan needed to do the work.
This
butress
a support usually of stone or brick; supports the wall of a building
buttress
buttresses
 the point why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe a person with a higher certification should be paid more than the uneducated workers. Another evident reason why

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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