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Some people think that there should be change while others not.write its advantage and disadvantage.

#people #change #advantage
Now a
days
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day
,
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,
adults of some nation
are preferring
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prefer
 to travel or work for a while between completing their high school and commencing graduate studies.
How ever
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However
,
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,
in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 will not be a good option to take a gap in studies after they finish their schooling
.
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.
 The greatest benefit of working or
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 is that they will be able to gain practical knowledge of
market
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the market
 and experience from a firm where they will be doing a job
,
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,
consequently
this
 will help them in getting a good job easily after they will finish their university studies
,
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,
for example
 -after graduate studies interviewer generally asks
question
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questions
a question
 based in
practice
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practical
 knowledge and experience
,
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,
so Aleta the person with some experience will be ahead of many other students
.
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.
Moreover
,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 will allow
then
objective case of they
them
 a chance to refresh and explore the world
,
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,
so that they will be of energy when university studies will begin.
On the other
hand taking
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hand, taking
 a
year
 gap can create some problems too
,
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,
there is a possibility
they
of them or themselves
their
 young students may get attracted towards wrong activities
such
 as consuming drugs and drinking alcohol during their free time
.
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.
Furthermore he
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Furthermore, he
/she will be wasting one precious
year
 of life.Along with these problems there is a chance
that university may
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that a university may
 change the rules of admission or may be the cutoff score of
upcoming
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the upcoming year
year
 will be higher
,
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,
in which he/she will not be eligible for admission. To conclude
,
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,
although
 taking a
year
 gap after high school has some positives, but in my opinion risks are more that young students may indulge in criminal activities which will ruin their life,
hence
 students should continue their education without any break.
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