Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

This
ia
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
a reality of some individuals that they did not perform better in
academics but
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academics, but
they
acheived
to gain with effort
achieved
their goals very well. I think they are excellent in practical not in theory. Experience is a key to success. Lack of understanding while in
classroom
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the classroom
a classroom
is
major problem
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a major problem
the major problem
with those who actually did not perform well during studies but got
star
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stars
in business or other stream.
They
a native or inhabitant of Thailand
Thai
people do not know how to express their knowledge through
words so, that
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words, so that
they can get passing
score but
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score, but
they actually know how
to do
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doing
practice in
real world
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the real world
.
For example
, in a
hindi
the most widely spoken of modern Indic vernaculars; spoken mostly in the north of India; along with English it is one of the main official languages of India; usually written in Devanagari script
Hindi
movie "Tare Zammen Par" a
child
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child's
name Ishaan was not a bright student like his sibling because he was suffering with a
diseas
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
name
dyslexia but
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dyslexia, but
hw
objective male pronoun, used to refer to a male human or animal
he
performed
brilliant
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brilliantly
in drawing to express their feelings in front of other mates and teachers. As expert said, only vocational
traning
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
is not enough to succeed in life rather, experience matters a lot because, it gives practical knowledge to deal with real business functions. To illustrate when a person
start
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starts
his
career he
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career, he
will earn
very small amount
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a very small amount
just for basic
needs but
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needs, but
spending time with jobs becomes a man with huge experience and
then
he
become
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becomes
able to claim more than essential needs. Mr. Dhirubhai Ambani was a less educated person he
start
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starts
his career with Rs 30 only with the help of his knowledge in business and now he
establised
brought about or set up or accepted; especially long established
established
establish
his empire all over the world which is being managed by his legal heirs Anil Dhirubhai Ambani and Mukesh Dhirubha Ambani. Conclusively, practice makes a man
perfect so
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perfect, so
, it will help to become successful. Only studies are not much for earning higher than others.
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