Television is dangerous because it destroys the family tie and community spirit. It is said by some that television absorbs so much of people’s time that they have no time to talk to each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Nowadays, a huge number of people
watch
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are watching
television
during their spare
time
. In some
houses TVs
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houses, TVs
have became
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have become
the
devises
an inclination or desire; used in the plural in the phrase 'left to your own devices'
devices
that attract everyone’s attention and are rarely switched off.
Although
it is incorrect to dispute the advantages of
television
, I myself do agree with people who say that it has more disadvantages.
First
of all, people really spend much less
time
for communication. Some families rest, eat, sleep with working TV’s and it has become a norm for a lot of people. I have witnessed the similar situation when I have visited my relatives. After a difficult working day they didn’t speak to each other,
moreover
, they wordless
stared
Suggestion
stare
into the screen during their dinner.
This
is really a dangerous situation as these people live in the same building and can be considered as family,
however they
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however, they
don’t know each other anymore, and even worst, they don’t spend
time
on
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with
their kids.
Secondly
,
television
has become an instrument which has a tremendous influence on a huge mass of people. Governments, politicians, trade marks successfully use the opportunity to attract our attention, to give us some information, which often is very controversial, advertise different products, etc. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would like to
emphasis
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emphasize
that we need to reduce the
time
we spend on watching
television
.
Instead
of that, it’s much
beneficial
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more beneficial
to become closer to our kids and other family members, to find some new hobbies, read books, catch up with friends and watch films online via internet.
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