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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The pictures illustrate the expenditure of
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in several selected nations during 5 years period from 1999 to 2004. It is noticeable that the consumption of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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 rose significantly in five European countries over the span, but income from
Fairtrade
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bananas
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 experienced a growth in three out of the five countries. On the whole, the
UK
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 outnumbered
on
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the two products in others. It can be seen from the table that in 1999, Switzerland had the highest figure in
coffee
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, at 3
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billions
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,
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 the vast majority of
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bananas
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 is
the
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UK
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, which accounted for 15
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billions
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.
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, by 2004,
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 of
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coffee
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 in the
UK
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 witnessed
a
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upward
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 20
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billions
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, and
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 was over three times higher
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 Switzerland's sales figure for
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coffee
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 in that year. The year 2004
also
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 saw
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 increase in the money spent on
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bananas
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 in the
UK
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 and Switzerland, with revenues rising by 32
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billions
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billion
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 and 4.5
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 in turn. Sales of the two
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 products were far lower in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. Small increases in
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coffee
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 can be seen, but remained at 2
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billions
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 or below in all three countries in both years. Eventually, there was a downward in
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's
bananas
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 in Belgium and Sweden in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fairtrade, coffee, bananas, uk, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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