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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The pictures illustrate the expenditure of
Fairtrade
coffee
 and
bananas
 in several selected nations during 5 years period from 1999 to 2004. It is noticeable that the consumption of
Fairtrade
coffee
 rose significantly in five European countries over the span, but income from
Fairtrade
bananas
 experienced a growth in three out of the five countries. On the whole, the
UK
 outnumbered
on
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the two products in others. It can be seen from the table that in 1999, Switzerland had the highest figure in
coffee
, at 3
billions
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,
while
 the vast majority of
Fairtrade
bananas
 is
the
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UK
, which accounted for 15
billions
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.
However
, by 2004,
earning
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 of
Fairtrade
coffee
 in the
UK
 witnessed
a
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upward
to
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 20
billions
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, and
this
 was over three times higher
that
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than
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 Switzerland's sales figure for
Fairtrade
coffee
 in that year. The year 2004
also
 saw
dramatic
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 increase in the money spent on
Fairtrade
bananas
 in the
UK
 and Switzerland, with revenues rising by 32
billions
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billion
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 and 4.5
billions
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 in turn. Sales of the two
Fairtrade
 products were far lower in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. Small increases in
Fairtrade
coffee
 can be seen, but remained at 2
billions
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billion
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 or below in all three countries in both years. Eventually, there was a downward in
Fairtrade
's
bananas
 in Belgium and Sweden in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fairtrade, coffee, bananas, uk, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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