Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Festivals that are related with tradition or religion is the symbol of a nation. In
this
present day,
although
people attend different occasions, but most of the them do not know the signification of their nation Festivals. In
this
situation they separately chill with their loving person. I totally agree with
this
statement and I will try to prove my argument in the following paragraphs. In
this
digital age the whole world is looking like a global village, and people specially adolescence are unknown about their national occasions,
on the contrary
they are impulsive by different cultural occasions. On
this
occasion
, they do lots of enjoyment as like, gossip with friends, visiting historical place and eat at a restaurant, but they do not perform the actual thing for that the festivals appear before them. In the religious
occasion
people have to perform some specific task that came on
this
occasion
, but in
this
situation without doing that they visit parks, tourist place and only gossip with their family member. The main reason is that people have no practise and knowledge of their traditional thing
also
have not any interest of their own culture. In a conclusion, I put down my pen by saying that
although
people enjoy their culture and religious festivals they actually forget the real value of that
occasion
. If they came to know about their basic meaning of festivals they will enjoy more than before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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