Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Festivals that are related with tradition or religion is the symbol of a nation. In

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present day,

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people attend different occasions, but most of the them do not know the signification of their nation Festivals. In

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situation they separately chill with their loving person. I totally agree with

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statement and I will try to prove my argument in the following paragraphs. In

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digital age the whole world is looking like a global village, and people specially adolescence are unknown about their national occasions,

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they are impulsive by different cultural occasions. On

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occasion

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, they do lots of enjoyment as like, gossip with friends, visiting historical place and eat at a restaurant, but they do not perform the actual thing for that the festivals appear before them. In the religious

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people have to perform some specific task that came on

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, but in

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situation without doing that they visit parks, tourist place and only gossip with their family member. The main reason is that people have no practise and knowledge of their traditional thing

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have not any interest of their own culture. In a conclusion, I put down my pen by saying that

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people enjoy their culture and religious festivals they actually forget the real value of that

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. If they came to know about their basic meaning of festivals they will enjoy more than before.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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238 words

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

One long-distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several years’ time, but they cause the same amount of pollution. So, some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of cars.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

in some culture the parents arrange marriage for their children but in others people choose their own marriage partner. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each system?

Some people think that schools are more effective if students are allowed to participate in running the school.State whether you agree or disagree.Give reasons for your answer using personal experiences or other examples.