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Health education is an essential aspect of community health. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the young high school students are asked to gain short term professional experience or travel before commencing
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 has been a trend these days. In my opinion, both of these practices have advantages and disadvantages. In many countries, mostly the western countries, students are motivated to do a job or travelling after senior secondary school.
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, it is believed that, gaining professional experience before going to the college will give you a good exposure to the real world of employment or travel fun.
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, students are in their growing stage of life, where they have just come out to a new phase. Taking a gap of a year's time will give an individual optimum time to learn a lot of things. Meanwhile, by the time they take admission into the college, they have already been groomed up by a year.
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 will
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 help them explore their field of interest and they can start working in the same.
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, many find disadvantages in
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 type of approach. They believe that it distract the young generation from moving towards the higher studies or travelling will decrease their interest towards studies.
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, one should understand that, experiences always make a person perfect. So, children should be motivated. In conclusion, taking a break of about a year for working or travelling will mostly groom-up the fresh minds with practical experiences. It has many advantages and very few disadvantages, which can be managed.
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 help young minds to feel their favourite field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • awareness
  • lifestyle choices
  • early detection
  • management of diseases
  • burden on healthcare
  • culture of prevention
  • chronic diseases
  • empowers
  • personal responsibility
  • health disparities
  • at-risk populations
  • social equity
  • public health guidelines
  • community resilience
  • health crises
  • preventive measures
  • healthcare costs
  • future generation
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