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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

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It's argued that more funds should be allocated to the traffic infrastructure rather than public transport systems. Personally, I think both thoroughfare and public transport systems have vital roles to play in modern society, and
therefore
 should be equal. On the one hand, better roads increase the levels of safety and reduces traffic congestion. As many accidents happen due to lack of adequate road infrastructure.
Moreover
, wider roads and a large number of highways can ease congestion in densely populated areas.
For example
, If roads are wider in areas like Slums of Mumbai, it will lead to smooth running of vehicles there and it will
also
 prove helpful in saving the time of people. Because they will not be stuck in a traffic jam.
On the other hand
, improved buses, trains and underground systems help in protecting the environment and benefit those who do not have their own vehicles. Public shipping is used by nearly 20 people's at one time.
As a result
, the number of personal vehicles is reduced on the path and environment is
also
 protected from pollution. A research has proved that the level of toxins in the air is 20% less in the areas where masses prefer to use public transit. And it is
also
 beneficial for those who have been migrated from one place to another and they don't have their personal means of transportation, and they use public means. In conclusion, I believe that government should spend money not only on the roads but public shipment
also
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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