Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Undoubtedly, art is the best way to depict the feeling of a person.
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, some masses think that investing the money on arts including
music
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and painting can be utilised on other necessities of a nation's citizen. As far as I am concerned, I totally advocate
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view and the reasons behind
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point of view will be discussed in
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the paragraphs
to come To inaugurate with, eradication of poverty is
prominent one
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a prominent one
prominently one
, as the world is developing but still there are some nations where it is difficult for destitute people to have two square meals.
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, if authority
take
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takes
note of
this
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class of
society
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society, then
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a country can diminish the poverty, which
consequently
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improve their living standard. Another key reason is associated with
economy
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the economy
of a region. To elaborate it, a place where all people live happily and have all basic amenities,
ithey
people in general
they
can give their best in growth of economy by
establising
set up or found
establishing
small scale industries or large scale industries.
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, in India, many people are shopkeepers and sell traditional things
of
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about
a specific place where visitor come to visit.
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, it helps in increasing the financial status of that area.
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, there are certain countries where still crime rate against the women is at its peak.
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This
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Thus
, the regime can enforce some
strigent
demanding strict attention to rules and procedures
stringent
laws against miscreants so that females can enjoy their rights equally and they are not apprehensive about going outdoors alone, rather than patronage the
music
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and arts since human safety should the
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priority of every nation.
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but not the least, musician and artist can be eminent by themselves with the right usage of social media, whereas it is onus
of
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on
the government to upgrade the laws of any country. For an instance, pollution is surging with each passing day by dint of apathy of
law makers
a maker of laws; someone who gives a code of laws
lawmakers
towards
environment
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the environment
.
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.
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Therefore rule
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Therefore, rule
and regulations can be inflicted by
government
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the government
to be
abide
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abided
. But if an individual is interested in
music
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and
arts
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the arts
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he can show his talent through YouTube any many sites. In compendium, I want to reiterate that
state
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the state
is accountable for the progress of any
nation
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nation, therefore
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it must
priortize
assign a priority to
prioritize
prioritise
prioritizes
the public services over
arts
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the arts
and
music
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in
tems
status with respect to the relations between people or groups
terms
of
incurr
make oneself subject to; bring upon oneself; become liable to
incurred
inquiry
the fund of a country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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