According to a recent study, the more time people use the Internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. How far do you agree with this opinion?

The purpose of
this
essay is analysing the current situation with
pension
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a pension system
the pension system
pension systems
system
of our
country
and defining advantages and disadvantages of it. The essay
first
will provide information about what the
pension
system
is,
second
will give information about
pension
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the pension system
system
in Kazakhstan,
then
I will share my opinion and tell you about the pros and cons of
this
system
in our
country
. The
pension
system
is a set of legal, economic, organizational institutions and norms that aim, under certain conditions, to provide material support for citizens (usually the elderly) by paying them a
pension
. There are several types of
pension
systems in the world and they are divided by some attribute
such
as depending on the government’s participation (public, private, mixed type), on the principle of accumulation (solidarity, funded, provisionally funded). In my lovely
country
we have a
pension
system
that depends on your saving. Basic
pension
provision is provided by the state in the form of a basic and
solidary
pension
, funded by tax revenues in the budget. The
second
level includes mandatory 10% employee contributions and mandatory occupational
pension
contributions of employers in the amount of 5% of the income of employees engaged in dangerous working conditions. And the
third
level consists of individual and corporate voluntary
pension
contributions. Now let’s move to the pros and cons based on my opinion. Accumulative
pension
system
motivates people accumulate personal savings and self-provision their own old
age
, establishing the dependence of the size of
pension
payments from contributions and investment management.
However
, the problem is that current employees have a very small amount of salary from which
pension
contributions are paid to the
pension
fund. If the share of low-paid workers does not decrease,
then
the number of future pensioners who have not earned a decent
pension
will be as large as the number of low-paid workers. The poverty of employees is transformed into the poverty of pensioners without stopping. The other problem is the savings are actually greatly devalued in dollar terms and at the moment the
pension
is melting along with the value of the national currency. The Tenge exchange rate is very dependent on the price of oil and even with its stable value the rate dives down. Due to lack of experience and knowledge in the field of
pension
provision I asked my mother who is a pensioner what she thinks about
this
. It was kind a research. She said that there are more negative statements than positive in
pension
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the pension system
system
. I’ll start with the negative. She said that some pensions are so small that they sometimes do not have enough for food, and because some have to provide for their entire family with their
pension
. Of course,
this
will not be enough for a few people. People have to
work
after
retirement
to feed their family and as often happens, they are not hired because they have reached
retirement
age
. There is
also
the problem of
retirement
age
. With each adopted reform, they increase
this
age
and at the moment women in Kazakhstan must reach 63 years of
age
to retire. What about nurses who have to
work
until they are 63 years old, many people have poor eyesight since they are 50 years old and nurses need good eyesight to do their job well. Given the
age
of mortality in our
country
and the
age
of
pension
many questions arise. The older generation does not get their
pension
for long. In other countries, people often travel after
retirement
,
this
can be noticed if you have been abroad. And our people do not travel they cannot afford to go to the city and do not get out of their villages. Foreign pensioners enjoy their lives when our pensioners are poor and fight for food. Old
age
is needed to enjoy the rest of your life, not to survive in our reality.
Finally
, positive arguments. She said that the good thing is that our
pension
payments are still in comparison more than in Russia since her relatives live there and receive pennies.
Also
, we have some privileges for large children, disabled people, and so on. At 18,
this
question is not critical.
Although
it's worth thinking about. And it is worth it at
this
age
, because in fact, all my life I will
work
for my old
age
, my future
pension
. I will not talk about how my
pension
will be formed, because as long as I carry out my
work
and
work
experience, everything may change more than once, but I hope that at the same time the attitude of the state to people will change.

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  • Digital era
  • Social isolation
  • Cyberspace
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Global village
  • Virtual reality
  • Remote connections
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Digital divide
  • Cyber-socialization
  • Screen time
  • Online networking
  • Physical disconnection
  • Social dynamics
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