Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, In

this

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modern society, children have

lot

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lots

of opportunity on

education system

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the education system

and some school have more focused on individual children’s personality or what they have interested in. I definitely agree

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statement,

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however there

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however, there

is a negative point that if the children could be choose optional

instead

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of compulsory.

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of all, it is not only the difficulty subject

such

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mathematic

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mathematics

and philosophy, every child will have one or two weak subjects or they think too difficult some subjects for them. What is

affect

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affected

to them after they choose a subject? If every child can make it a choice and extend the children’s interests that will have an advantage in the future of the children. Because, the children are very honest, if they thought the subjects are not interested or too difficult, their brain would be

shutdown

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shut down

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if they got the bad test score that will not make happy

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for

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them.

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, they lose their

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confidence

or they would lose interested in study.

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, I consider that the children

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need

learn

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to learn

every

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subject

in bases

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as mathematical or science until the children are young children, it will be helpful for their life sometimes. Because it would be essential skills in our life and the children needs

understand

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to understand

what

make

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makes

the world from.

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, when people go to a supermarket, we can check a food or things price which we should know what the number is. It is extremely important for a live the

children

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child

learn every

subjects

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subject

of basic. To sum up, in my opinion, the children concentrated on specific subject which they are interested in, because it would

grown

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grow

up their brain rather than

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tired of the world

bored

buried

bad

subjects.

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, I believe that every

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subject

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important to the children are studying for their future.

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