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Government nowadays think about space science and technology in our country spend funds for other new research so that other thing it's worng and some people think that it's right. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statements

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Presently our nation is greatly working In
technology field
Suggestion
the technology field
 that because of great name or fame in the global market.
However
, other people think that It is good for our
country
 and other opinion is does well in space
science
technology
. In
this
 essay I will discuss
further
 in a positive way and some example shows in related
this
technology
. On a One hand that, Space
science
 is greatly difficult and expansive not only in our position
,
Accept space
,
but
also
 internationally, that because of some people think that it is not good, but I 98aprisiate for our scientist they are nicely work and great opportunity to work in
this
 field
for Example
, recently launched
magalyan
Portuguese navigator in the service of Spain; he commanded an expedition that was the first to circumnavigate the world (1480-1521)
Magellan
 and
chandrayan
gratly
to an extraordinary extent or degree
greatly
 got successfully with little cost compare to other
country
,
Accept space
,
while got
this
 opportunity
femous
 our
country
 in space
science
 that result
science
 and
technology
 are good for spend money from our tax,
that is
 one positive point.
On the other hand
,
technology
 system in India greatly go ahead with a new other advanced system make everybody knew about
first
 small satellite
occupide
a reproduction of a written record (e.g. of a legal or school record)
copied
 from our
country
 and he was only 18 year old student study in school level, it is one of the best example for our nation and his boys
also
 invited by NASA space centre it is appreciated for our nation so that in
science
 and
technology
 spend money is not worth they think is not appropriate. In conclusion,
Science
 and Modern
technology
 are good way go great level spend money from the government it is good think recently our species Center are best in the market and
also
 some small and big societies are working new research with advanced material with a less cost estimate due to government ought to spend funds for
this
 type of
technology
 in good worth.

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