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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #advertisements #products #lives
To begin
 with, our lives in the modern world are all about social media and immense amount of exposure to the internet which has given rise to advertisements. While some people feel that advertisements tell about new products and might improve lives, I
on the other hand
, I believe that advertising encourages us to buy unnecessary goods and waste money. In
this
 essay I will lay down some supporting points to my argument along with certain examples. Now a days there are a lot of products being sold through the television medium.
For example
, there are ten different commercials for even a bathing soap. Some say it moisturises while the other say it moisturises and make you look younger too.
This
 gives rise for a lot of people to look up to these products for beauty and end up buying a lot of it. Little do they realize that the models are normal human beings hidden behind layers of harmful makeup.
As a result
, these expensive products bar their expiry date and eventually are thrown away and get wasted.
For instance
, people in the Japanese culture, they have adopted minimum usage, which means they only buy those products which they really need to live their lives.
This
 practice is inherited in their kids,
subsequently
, each person starts valuing the needs of others.
Hence
, there are resources in abundance and no one sleeps hungry. Now imagine if people just go with the flow of buying products because their role model is advertising it, there will be waste and less commodities available for the poor. I
therefore
 conclude by revisiting a plot of the movie 'Infinity War', wherein the negative character has a strong belief that we are a world of finite resources and rich are getting rich, poor are getting poorer. He
then
 ends up killing half humanity to fit with the resources for everyone. So, it is important that people understand that we coexist with others humans along with species and everyone should have sufficed.
Hence
, yes advertisements encourage people to buy things that they really do not need.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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