Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #advertisements #products #lives

To begin

with, our lives in the modern world are all about social media and immense amount of exposure to the internet which has given rise to advertisements. While some people feel that advertisements tell about new products and might improve lives, I

on the other hand

, I believe that advertising encourages us to buy unnecessary goods and waste money. In

this

essay I will lay down some supporting points to my argument along with certain examples. Now a days there are a lot of products being sold through the television medium.

For example

, there are ten different commercials for even a bathing soap. Some say it moisturises while the other say it moisturises and make you look younger too.

This

gives rise for a lot of people to look up to these products for beauty and end up buying a lot of it. Little do they realize that the models are normal human beings hidden behind layers of harmful makeup.

As a result

, these expensive products bar their expiry date and eventually are thrown away and get wasted.

For instance

, people in the Japanese culture, they have adopted minimum usage, which means they only buy those products which they really need to live their lives.

This

practice is inherited in their kids,

subsequently

, each person starts valuing the needs of others.

Hence

, there are resources in abundance and no one sleeps hungry. Now imagine if people just go with the flow of buying products because their role model is advertising it, there will be waste and less commodities available for the poor. I

therefore

conclude by revisiting a plot of the movie 'Infinity War', wherein the negative character has a strong belief that we are a world of finite resources and rich are getting rich, poor are getting poorer. He

then

ends up killing half humanity to fit with the resources for everyone. So, it is important that people understand that we coexist with others humans along with species and everyone should have sufficed.

Hence

, yes advertisements encourage people to buy things that they really do not need.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
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