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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

#people #house #apartment
Undoubtedly, a place to live in is
indispensable necessity
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an indispensable necessity
the indispensable necessity
 of human beings.
However
, some masses give
pretence
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the pretence
a pretence
 to live in a
house
, whereas others reside in an
apartment
 by considering it's more merits in comparison with
house
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the house
. In my opinion, there are far more positives of living in a
house
 than negatives if compared with
apartment
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the apartment
 which I will elaborate in
paragraphs
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the paragraphs
 to come. To inaugurate with, the prominent advantage is making a
house
 according to
one
's own choice and economical condition. To elaborate it, when an individual
build
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builds
 a
house
 he can select the design of his
house
 and money can be invested
on
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in
this
 according to
one
's financial condition.
Therefore
, it gives a
person
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person's
 sense of
satisfaciction
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 as he
spend
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spends
 manage the spending of money
accordingly
. For an instance, In India, most of the urban houses are not that much big as city dwellers like love to utilise
money
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the money
 for other elementary necessities. Along with
this
, an owner can demolish or renovate his
house
 when there is requirement
such
 as when he wants to build a shop in the same place that time he need no permission from someone.
Thus
, it is
significance
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the significance
 of having
house
 rather than
apartment
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an apartment
.
Furthermore
, Houses are big enough and whenever any event takes place in a family, it is easy for guests to stay at
owner's home
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the owner's home
, while it is
uphill task
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an uphill task
 to make the guests comfortable to live in an
apartment
 since it is not much
spacious
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more spacious
.
However
, only
one
 demerit is associated with dwelling in a
house
 is that it requires somewhat large space compared to
apartment
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an apartment
the apartment
, which is
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 not possible in metropolitan cities owing to the scarcity of space. From the above mentioned views, it is conspicuous that even though
lhouse
a dwelling that serves as living quarters for one or more families
house
 has
one
 drawback, it's merits
can not
can not
cannot
 be
ovelooked
not taken into account
overlooked
.
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