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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In some countries, more and more people are shopping in large stores outside of town, so many stores in the small town
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 have gone bankrupt.
Moreover
, people who don't have a car have trouble shopping at the outside store, and it can increase when using a car. While
this
 has many different benefits, I think the limitations are beyond its benefits. On the one hand, shopping in large stores outside the city can have many advantages.
Firstly
,
this
 helps businesses outside the city earn more profits, can promote the development of many aspects of the remaining fields
such
 as economy and tourism. . .
This
 leaves people less motivated to migrate to cities, which makes it easier to address the population burden on cities.
Second
, the out-of-town priority helps the auto industry grow, because people without cars have to buy one to go to these suburban shops.
This
 leads to the promotion of economic growth there.
On the other hand
, I believe there are major limitations to
this
 change. The
first
 is air pollution, because using many
cars
Suggestion
car
 emits a large amount of exhaust fumes into the air.
This
 causes people to have many respiratory diseases.
In addition
, heavy traffic congestion on the streets on the outskirts of the city is a serious problem.
This
 can contribute to people wasting time and being late for work when they are stuck on the road for a long time, making them angry and annoyed. In short, there are some advantages of increasing shopping in out-of-town stores, but I still believe its disadvantages are more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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