Some people suggest that bringing up children by thw whole family includimg uncles, aunts and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. To what extend are you agree or disagree?

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Some hold the opinion of raising children in

extended family

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the extended family

has greater advantages rather than nuclear ones. I personally believe that indeed, it has many benefits like forming good behaviour in children and making them more friendly with

tradional

consisting of or derived from tradition

traditional

values

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with, bringing up children by their relatives

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especially grandparents

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play a significant role in the form of their social behaviour

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Undoubtedly, current generation

need

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needs

more control to defend them from harmful effects of modern technologies

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But

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it can be impossible to do so in nuclear families in which both parents work and have no time make conversation with their children who are left unattended in the hands of modern devices

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If there are

granparents

a parent of your father or mother

grandparents

to supervise them in families with what they are doing

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who their friends are

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they will not enter in dead -end streets

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They

also

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are taught more effectively to behave

approprietly

in an appropriate manner

appropriately

in society by their

closes which

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closes, which

is different from other children who are grown up in nuclear families.

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, it seems that many today's

child

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children

are deprived of cultural events due to given

lack

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the lack

of attention and time by their

workholic

person with a compulsive need to work

workaholic

parents

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To improve

this

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attitude

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definetely

without question and beyond doubt

definitely

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they need a whole family in which all family members have a responsibility for teaching the child in family about traditional values by making them inform about national heroes and historical buildings. Children well informed about their past have higher patriotism as well.

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way is more important to pay more attention I think

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since

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mostly,

young generation

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the young generation

have

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has

highe r

advanced in complexity or elaboration

higher

chance to bring their countries

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which are maintaining

greatly

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great

cultural sides, for popularity over the world

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To conclude

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It can be clear that bringing up children by all members in

family

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the family

a family

is better when taking into consider of some merits in increased number of well being children in communities and the form of

good attitude

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a good attitude

towards national sites of countries.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

334 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

extended family
child-rearing
diverse experiences
harmonious family environment
sense of belonging
emotional support
wisdom and guidance
multicultural societies
heritage and traditions
conflicts and confusion

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