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More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science,why is this happening? What are the effects of this?

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Admittedly, nowadays students at colleges or institutes do not want to maintain studying science. The aim of
this
 essay is to scrutinize the reasons and effects of
this
 issue.
First
 and foremost important cause that
arising
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a rising
 tendency to deny strengthen
knowledge bases
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the knowledge bases
 in terms of science, is
financial wage
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a financial wage
that is
 paid for professors for their staff. Having said that, one who owns scientific knowledge can earn a little average of money in comparison with businessman,
subsequently
 it causes
to
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of
 limitation of scientists.
However
, some people opine that it is
myph
a traditional story accepted as history; serves to explain the world view of a people
myth
 to become a PHD after graduation of
scientific institution
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scientific institutions, for
scientific institutions for
the scientific institution for
for example
, reasonably not all the pupil who has
high degree
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a high degree
 of knowledge assisted from
successful company
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successful companies
a successful company
 for their research. To become
professor
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a professor
 in
contest
discourse that surrounds a language unit and helps to determine its interpretation
context
 of
physics
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physics, for
for
example takes
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example, takes
 5-7
years roughly
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years, roughly
, rather than spending their time students find it advantageous choosing
easier way
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an easier way
 to develop
successful career
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successful careers
a successful career
.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
the revolution has its effects
on
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of
this
 trend,
daring
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dare
 say employments
such
 as
businessman or IT programmer
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a businessman or IT programmer
businessman or IT programmers
 are having more emphasis than other trades. Generally speaking,
abovementioned
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above mentioned
 exercises are more common than else and thieves known as hackers stealing millions of dollars from authority for their successful career. When it comes to businessmen, they are crucial figures that enrich both government and themselves,
therefore
 the restrictions in
number
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the number
 of
rejection
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rejections
 to study science is increasing even companies work as an accountant being performed by technology as computers. At the final stage, in
technology evolved world there
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the technology evolved world, there
the technology evolved world there
 is a little benefit for scientists. In turn revolution created today is the result of
scientists
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scientific
scientist
 struggles, thereby reducing staff for themselves. But it is predictable that without scientists who always make efforts to develop world, it will not be pleasant sight and there are bulk of things that humankind waiting from them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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