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Unemployment has become an increasing problem in the recent past. What factors contribute to an increase in unemployment and what steps can be taken to solve the problem?

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Over the
last
 years, the
unemployment
 rate is increasing at an alarming
level
 in many countries around the world. There are numerous factors behind
this
 phenomenon. Here, I would like to mention some causes
for
Suggestion
of
unemployment
 and possible solutions. Multifarious points shore up the causes of
unemployment
.
First
 and foremost, the economic recession is on the rise in recent years all over the world.
Thus
, many companies and
such
 institutions are reducing the number of the employees in order to decrease the expenditure.
Consequently
, large numbers of employees find themselves
with out
in absence of
without
 a
job
.
Moreover
, many people are refusing to do some jobs.
In other words
, they prefer jobs that
matches
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match
 their
education
level
 and refusing the jobs which is they considered below their expectations.
thence
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Thence
, adding more numbers to the
unemployment
.
In addition
 to
this
, there are many studies that conducted on the relation between
unemployment
 and the
level
 of
education
, the result of these studies clearly connects the
level
 of
unemployment
 to the low
education
level
, as people have a high
education
, their chance in
job market
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the job market
 is increasing. There are many steps could be taken
in
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at
with
 the
level
 of the governments as well as individual
level
. The government implements certain economic strategies that
leads
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lead
 to increase in
job
 opportunities, Another way of reducing
this
 problem is by investing and supporting the small and medium projects That provide fast and sustainable profits.
the
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The
 people could play an important role, everyone can increase his/her chance in getting a
job
 by
education
.
This
 is due to the fact that, the
job
 market
is required
Suggestion
has required
requires
 a high
education
level
. In conclusion, as the subject of work is a concern of many people in order to earn bread and butter for their families,
therefore
 it is the governments and individual responsibility to find their own solutions.
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