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nowaday , people normally stretch their works hours and get stressed than before . what are the reasons for this ? what can employers do to make people's life easier ?

#nowaday #people #stretch #works #hours #employers #life
Corporate culture has grown with time and the impact is clearly
visiblie
capable of being seen; or open to easy view
visible
 on people's
life
. Nowadays, it is seen that people
work
 longer hours than required, which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 their lifestyle leading to stress, anxiety and various other diseases associated with it. Many different factors are responsible for that and I believe employers play a vital role in making their employees
life
 easier. There has been many case studies conducted by top universities to observe reasons behind stresses lifestyles of people. It was discovered, that majority of people are involved in working late hours, due to pressure from their bosses to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
 the deadline for completion of the task assigned to them. Tight deadlines and fear of losing the job leaves no choice for a person, but to
work
 late nights which severely hampers their health.
However
, the big multinationals have now realised the importance of
work
life
 balance and adopt the best practice for
there
of them or themselves
their
 employees. Many companies like Google and Facebook have
strict policy
Suggestion
strict policies
a strict policy
 in place to make sure that person is not working more
tha
conjunction used in comparatives
than
to
 their shift. I believe that employers should have regular health camps organized in their offices to ensure better health of
there
of them or themselves
their
 employees.
This
 way they will set an example for other employers to adopt the same practice. To conclude, a person should manage
there
of them or themselves
their
 time to avoid working at
stretch
Suggestion
a stretch
 and employers shall ensure that employees are keeping well. If the worker is healthy and have
stress free
Suggestion
a stress free life
life
, it will lead to better output
in
Suggestion
at
work
, which will result in increased revenues for the company.
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