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The graph below represents the total expert of clothing from 3 different countries over a time period. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

The graph below represents the total expert of clothing from 3 different countries over a time period. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
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Both maps present how an
island
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 was developed for tourism over time. The
island
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 is around 250 meters long and is surrounded entirely by the ocean. The development of the
island
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 was huge with many facilities added over time. Many facilities were constructed on the
island
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. Accommodation is now numerous, with 6 buildings erected to the west of the
island
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, and a
further
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 9 rooms added to the east. In the
middles
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 of the
lodgings
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 a restaurant and reception area were
also
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 built, with footpaths and vehicle tracks added to connect the buildings. A pier was built to the south of the
island
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, where boats can arrive. The trees remained unchanged on the
island
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, with facilities erected around them. The only development to the beach on the west is a swimming area which was added.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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