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Due to rise in crime, the use kf cctv cameras at publicplaces is increasingly day by day .what are the advantages and disadvantages of using cctv cameras at public places?

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It is ubiquitous fact that owing to increase in
crime
 rates, the tendency to use observance cameras in public places is
also
 increasing with each passing day.
This
 phenomenon has both pros
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 cons.
Firstly
,
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,
this
 essay will reaffirm how
such
 sophisticated enrich devices raise fear in offenders as the prime benefits followed by its detrimental effects in terms of invading people's privacy. The pre-eminent reason for these cameras is that they play a pivotal
rolein
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role in
 preventing
crime
 from
occurance
an event that happens
occurrence
. A person fears perpetrating
crime
. To demonstrate, during the survey of 2010 which is conducted by
prexise
 security
itrevealed
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it revealed
 that in
china
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Chinese
 authorities provide
cctv
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CCTV
 cameras in public places.
Therefore
,
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,
using
such
 devices act as a firm deterrent for criminals. Another merit of cameras, these make it
easy
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easier
 to catch criminals and get them behind the bars by using recording from these devices which can be used as
on
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
 evidence for legal authorities which make it easy for them to nab the perpetrators of
crime
.
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.
Moreover
,
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,
such
 devices are
immensly
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
 economical to install and they can record activities 24/7 at low price.
In other
words if
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words, if
 these devices are not
used
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used, then
then
governmenthas
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government has
 to spend a big chunk of money in terms of recruiting more policemen to keep neighbourhood safe. Despite the advantages of cameras these devices introduce people's privacy
.
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.
 Every citizen has right to freedom and when they are
contantly
without variation or change, in every case
constantly
 being monitored the chances are that they might feel reluctant to commute to these places where
are security cameras are
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security cameras are
insttaledas
set up for use
installed
 they fear of getting
threatend
(of flora or fauna) likely in the near future to become endangered
threatened
.
Moreover
,
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,
 video recordings can be
maniputed
influence or control shrewdly or deviously
manipulated
 by some corrupt
officals
a worker who holds or is invested with an office
officials
offices
officers
 may be blackmail the innocents are
implucate
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implicated
implicate
implicates
 them in false cases. In conclusion,
although
 observance cameras
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 to raise fear in offenders
abdeasy
 to nab the criminals
,
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,
 it
effect
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affects
affect
 the life of
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every day; without missing a day
daily
Dali
 commuters they
might be feel
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might feel
 reluctant to communicate with others due to security surveillance
,
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,
and sometime the innocent peoples are blackmailed by some corrupted
officals
a worker who holds or is invested with an office
officials
.
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